Does this sound ok? Any objections to if its acurate or not?

Once I’m outside, the cool, clean breeze swirls around me and whips my long, curly, brown hair across my face. The fall temperature in Branson feels similar to the fall temperature back in back in New York, except Branson’s air isn’t filled with car exhaust, so sucking in a lung full of air doesn’t make you wheeze.